Wednesday, March 28, 2012

Terrible Storm of a Snowfall

I have lived with my cave family for six years. This winter it snow unexpectadly. My Dad was gone hunting, my mother was also looking for berries. I was no where near the cave when it started to snow hard. I finally found a hide to use as an umbrella. It was cold, and I had ice in my mouth, the only thing I could hear was the pounding of heavy snow. I continued toward my destination, but the large blankets of white drifts are now getting in the way. Suddendly I realize I might be in a problem, and I know  am beyond scared. Mr. wind blows hard on my hide umbrella and it flips all around not really doing its purpose. One wonders if the hide is helping at all and I know I have nothing else. It seems the cave I need to return to has moved- no I am lost.
*wondering if because the setting is cave man area - should I leave out the word umbrella?

1 Comments:

At April 12, 2012 at 9:24 PM , Blogger Kathy said...

It depends if you would like to have your story be cohesive. When I read your story, my mind said umbrella???????. I would guess that it does not fit in your story. It sounds scary and exciting at the same time. I want to know if the heroine makes it back...... I bet you are stronger than you think - talking to the character.

 

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