I probably need to know if the last two lines should stay in
A Poem about Northwest Crazy Weather
It rains and rains
It snows softly
It hails hard and fast
It blows wind
It has s sun peaking through clouds
It has a bright sun
It has lots of clouds
What it is doing right
now no one knows
posted by Leslie Lee @ 11:55 PM
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2 Comments:
I think it is Ironic that I am reading this today as it is the day before spring and I woke up to snow...We totally have crazy weather, I often call it bi-polar. I like the last two lines but I might put the now on the same line as the sentence it goes with and the last line be no one knows.
Leslie--Playing with format would be fun with your poem. For example,
It rains
and
rains.
It snows
softly.
I also wonder if deleting the "it" would change and possibly strengthen the poem. Remove it and see.
Adding another twist is how hard it is for weathermen to predict our weather. Mother nature does her own thing.
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